The fall

This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda. This time your entry has to have one sentence that is repeated at least thrice in your post. The sentence that I have used is ‘The moment seemed perfect’, in this poem, based on a real incident of an afternoon. The post is also chosen by Blogadda as one of this week’s WOW posts.






I was just walking,
Aimlessly, and felt
Time came to a standstill,
When the Saturday afternoon,
Calm yet breezy,
Shimmered in the soft light,
With the golden leaves
From deciduous trees
Started coming down
Waving through the wind,
And I came to see them
For the first time,
The moment seemed perfect.

At the far end
Of the
Otherwise forlorn street,
Among the pile of leaves
Fallen all day and not cleared,
Line of parked cars
In front of
Old fashioned houses,
And the wind, like roaring ocean,
Spotted two of them-
Bright, vibrant and restless
The kids,
As they always are, and
The moment seemed perfect.

One of them, a boy, was picking
The fallen leaves,
And the girl, even prettier in pink
Was lifting her own walker
With all her might, from the footpath to the house,
It was hard to take eyes off them, for
The moment seemed perfect
Even from a distance, until
Until I saw their mother,
Urging them to get inside,
With a glowing cigar, in her hands.

Also adding my recitation to it.

Hope this message reaches all those people who are blessed with children but not doing their best as parents.

24 thoughts on “The fall

  1. Heard the audio and enjoyed it, could feel the pain in your heart when I read the ending. There are some people to who life revolves around themselves and everything else takes second place. Its sad that her own kids are not important to her.

    • Thank you so much. Yes, I saw the woman and felt sorry for those two kids – it’s very common in developed countries I guess.

        • Ah okay, no got it now thanks 🙂 it’s not a bother at all – I am open to any form of critic, and actually I loved that line but was under the impression that you were referring to some line in the poem and hence the confusion. I am very happy to learn that I was mistaken.

  2. Lovely poem. Where there are some who pray to god to bless them with a child…there are others who don’t know the value of what god has given them. Its just pathetic….hope your daughter is doing fine. 🙂

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